Gaara 'n' Shukaku (S) || By Rasengan_89


 Topic: Gaara 'n' Shukaku (S) || By Rasengan_89
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  Posted on January 8, 2015 12:59
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#1

Credits for the final banner I used go to me


Hello there.
Comments like "Bad skills" "6.1/10" "wtf lol" will be ignored.
RATE AND COMMENT PLEASE, EXPLAIN RATE UNDER 8.5

H A P P Y
N E W
Y E A R

Remade an old manga character, changed some numbers, reworded some skills, nothing else,


Chakra Usage: 0 - 2 - 2 - 0 - 3




Here you are some notes before you comment:
- About the skills
Just define OP and UP and how should I change it.
- About the grammar
If you find any mistake, report it so I can fix that. I am Italian, you would help me in improving my English
- About the CnC
I want to read them. Without them I cant improve the character and myself

Credits go to:
- Rasengan_89 (me) for editing the pictures and making the characters.


Thanks to everyone who comments :)



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  Posted on January 8, 2015 13:08
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#2
10/10
most authentic, well balanced gaara I've seen created yet.
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  Posted on January 8, 2015 13:10
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#3
It has nice flow, and spike damage is justified by all the cost and time it takes to get there.
MAYBE add 1 turn cd to Funeral.
However I find the gifs SO laggy it makes them so bad, I don't know if that's the purpose, or it's just my computer.
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  Posted on January 8, 2015 13:13
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#4
2nd skill, should say "has" instead of got"
3rd skill says "still" instead of "skill".

The problem with the third skill is that its damage improvement seems to work with any stun, which can obviously be a huge problem. Any full stun on the target means it'll deal 130 piercing damage. GG. It should just improve itself from Gaara's stuns. Also, I think the damage on this skill should just last one turn, since its improvement is so massive.

Otherwise, neat character.
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  Posted on January 8, 2015 13:16
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Fennekin wrote:
2nd skill, should say "has" instead of got"
3rd skill says "still" instead of "skill".

The problem with the third skill is that its damage improvement seems to work with any stun, which can obviously be a huge problem. Any full stun on the target means it'll deal 130 piercing damage. GG. It should just improve itself from Gaara's stuns. Also, I think the damage on this skill should just last one turn, since its improvement is so massive.

Otherwise, neat character.

3rd skill is fine (regarding the wording).
As for the stun, I will fix that, thanks :D

Thanks all too :D
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  Posted on January 8, 2015 16:42
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Fennekin wrote:
2nd skill, should say "has" instead of got"
3rd skill says "still" instead of "skill".

The problem with the third skill is that its damage improvement seems to work with any stun, which can obviously be a huge problem. Any full stun on the target means it'll deal 130 piercing damage. GG. It should just improve itself from Gaara's stuns. Also, I think the damage on this skill should just last one turn, since its improvement is so massive.

Otherwise, neat character.

outherwise its very good

10/10
live to counquer ,die to discover
  Posted on January 8, 2015 18:16
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Fixed.
>> Latest Character: Sand Operation ~ Best Improved CC Maker in 2013!

All my characters are going through rework (slowly) ~ OMG IT'S OVER 30 THOUSAND views, thanks a lot! ~ Achievement Unlocked: Defeat OP Sahedy ~ Naruto Minimalist Wallpapers
  Posted on January 9, 2015 15:25
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#8
10/10 pro
Can u link char creation tool?

thx
  Posted on January 15, 2015 15:36
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YellowTsukoyumi wrote:
10/10 pro
Can u link char creation tool?

thx
I dont use it anymore, hence I dont know where you can find it
>> Latest Character: Sand Operation ~ Best Improved CC Maker in 2013!

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  Posted on January 15, 2015 17:47
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10/10
very creative!
  Posted on May 5, 2015 16:37
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Thanks
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  Posted on June 23, 2015 20:13
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#12
First skill stuns a skill that's already been used, but doesn't counter it, yes ? But if that skill's cooldown is 2 or more, the effect is rendered useless. For that, I think you should decrease its cost by one random, or make it 2 randoms. Also I don't think the funeral should be Melee. Rehabilitated Gaara's funeral is PHYSICAL, RANGED, INSTANT, so there you have it . Otherwise, I really am impressed 9.7/10
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