Opposite trap 2


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  Posted on August 15, 2014 14:45
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everyone is dead
  Posted on August 15, 2014 14:48
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9/10

A few grammar errors
Lovely pics
  Posted on August 15, 2014 15:26
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Nice pics

And the mission Name Lmao
  Posted on August 15, 2014 15:29
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It's that character you talked about in chat (AWE)
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  Posted on August 15, 2014 15:35
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  Posted on August 15, 2014 15:45
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What a dangerous bi***. I'd hate to fight her. Still good though.

9/10
  Posted on August 15, 2014 16:09
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9.5/10 GJ

-0.5 A few grammar errors .
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  Posted on August 15, 2014 23:39
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#8
it's nice that you're getting used to concepts and she flows really well

things that should be fixed:
Investigation
- 1st sentence: 'energy' should be 'energies'
- you forgot the period (.) for the last sentence

Deduction
- you should specify when does the skill actually end (only 2nd effect was specified)

Jeet Kune Do
- 'poll' should be 'pool'
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