Young Naruto


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  Posted on June 5, 2014 14:47
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Pics by Azredal or -Yugi- do not know
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Please explain rates under 7
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  Posted on June 5, 2014 14:54
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underpowered, plain Naruto clones shouldn't ignore because of length of cooldown make it 4 and
6/10

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OkamiKaizoku wrote:
underpowered, plain Naruto clones shouldn't ignore because of length of cooldown make it 4 and
6/10

but I fell for only 1 attack?


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  Posted on June 5, 2014 15:04
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Character:
First skill: Why should he gain destructibile defense and why chakra and ranged as classes? That should be Chakra, Instant and that's not even a 'transformation'. He concentrates his chakra.

Second skill: I don't get how should a skill be named '(name of a character) and 'kill'. Like typing at a sasuke shippuden character 'Orochimaru kill'. Like that skill may only be used on orochimaru. It also has no 'affliction' in the classes.. and it deals affliction damage.

Third skill: How should that be invisible if the foes are taking damage during 2 turns? They'll take 10 affliction damage for 2 turns and the skill is invisible? The opponent will know for sure that you used that skill. You also forgot the third class:
Instant, Action or Control.

He's weak, skill names are not interessting at all and he's not original.


Suggestions:
First skill:
Make him gain 1 random chakra each turn during 3 turns and during this time, it would be nice for him to gain some defense. At least 5%/10% damage reduction that is permanent and stacks.
Costs: 1 ninjutsu
Cooldown: 4
Classes: Chakra, Instant

Second skill:
Change that name. The skill is underpowered at this moment. I suggest you to increase their damage dealt to 30 damage. No need to be affliction. And the target should have their damage dealt descreased by 5 points for 1 turn. During his first skill, the damage dealt of the foe should be descreased by 10 more.
Costs: 1 taijutsu
Cooldown: 1
Classes: Physical, Instant, Melee

Third skill:
If naruto uses this skill, he should ignore half of the harmful skills used on him. After 2 turns, the second skill of naruto will target all foes that used a skill on Naruto, if used.
Costs: 2 random
Cooldown: 3
Classes: Chakra, Instant

Rating:
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the first skill.
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the second skill.
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the third skill.
Lost 0.5 for no sense at the third skill.
Lost 0.5 for no originality/plain skills.
Lost 0.5 for wrong name at the first skill and also for the name of the second skill.
Lost 0.5 for no flow/underpowered character.
Lost 0.5 for the pictures.

Rate: 6


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  Posted on June 5, 2014 15:49
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Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
Character:
First skill: Why should he gain destructibile defense and why chakra and ranged as classes? That should be Chakra, Instant and that's not even a 'transformation'. He concentrates his chakra.

Second skill: I don't get how should a skill be named '(name of a character) and 'kill'. Like typing at a sasuke shippuden character 'Orochimaru kill'. Like that skill may only be used on orochimaru. It also has no 'affliction' in the classes.. and it deals affliction damage.

Third skill: How should that be invisible if the foes are taking damage during 2 turns? They'll take 10 affliction damage for 2 turns and the skill is invisible? The opponent will know for sure that you used that skill. You also forgot the third class:
Instant, Action or Control.

He's weak, skill names are not interessting at all and he's not original.


Suggestions:
First skill:
Make him gain 1 random chakra each turn during 3 turns and during this time, it would be nice for him to gain some defense. At least 5%/10% damage reduction that is permanent and stacks.
Costs: 1 ninjutsu
Cooldown: 4
Classes: Chakra, Instant

Second skill:
Change that name. The skill is underpowered at this moment. I suggest you to increase their damage dealt to 30 damage. No need to be affliction. And the target should have their damage dealt descreased by 5 points for 1 turn. During his first skill, the damage dealt of the foe should be descreased by 10 more.
Costs: 1 taijutsu
Cooldown: 1
Classes: Physical, Instant, Melee

Third skill:
If naruto uses this skill, he should ignore half of the harmful skills used on him. After 2 turns, the second skill of naruto will target all foes that used a skill on Naruto, if used.
Costs: 2 random
Cooldown: 3
Classes: Chakra, Instant

Rating:
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the first skill.
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the second skill.
Lost 0.5 for wrong classes at the third skill.
Lost 0.5 for no sense at the third skill.
Lost 0.5 for no originality/plain skills.
Lost 0.5 for wrong name at the first skill and also for the name of the second skill.
Lost 0.5 for no flow/underpowered character.
Lost 0.5 for the pictures.

Rate: 6


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I agree with this CnC and the rate. Make sure you know how the classes work before you make a character...
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  Posted on June 6, 2014 06:08
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Not bad character but he is weak try to improve him.
rate : 7/10 Gj :)
  Posted on June 6, 2014 06:13
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nice character but like others said a bit weak, 7/10
  Posted on June 6, 2014 12:16
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Akatsuki_Sofia: said perfectly
6/10
  Posted on June 6, 2014 13:01
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Thaks For All Rates


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  Posted on June 7, 2014 07:38
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Weak character but thanks for share with us 7/10