Erza Scarlet ~ by Sofi


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  Posted on August 3, 2013 14:26
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After long time creating naruto characters, I wanted to do some characters of different animes, so, I've started with Fairy tail. This is my first character that is not from the naruto anime.
~ please by kind
~ please rate and.or cnc
~ please tell me if grammar mistakes
~ please tell me if it is balanced
(I tried to balance it how much I could)
~ please tell me if there's something unclear

Credits:
~ Thank you firebane for the classes and costs.
~ Thank you radarobert for this amazing pics.
~ Thank you my dearest Kono for doing this character together with me.

Note: The alternate skills can not be 'overpowered' becaue they have a preparation.

So, I hope you like her.

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  Posted on August 3, 2013 14:38
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6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 14:45
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koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 14:48
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koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.

Not all characters needs flow. 'Not very creative'? Have you seen the idea of using 3 different skills to replace the 4th skill anywhere? Really...

Bad skill names? Do I have to name them like the anime names? It's the idea of 'creativity'. I can name them as how i want, so they won't sound like the overused names. This is the meaning of the word 'creativity'.

Thank you for finding my grammar mistakes.

Hmm physical? Why? She uses magic to summon the armor + the weapon, so the weapon is made of magic, as result, it should be classed as 'magic'.

Indeed, that skill is ranged. I'll fix that a bit later.


So, this character deserves just a 6/10?
That's the rate that you give to the characters of the starters that really looks like our in-game characters, but, well, thank you anyways for leaving this comment, even if I don't think that all of it should be true.

gogetajss4 wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10

In the first episodes, when she first came back to fairy tail, they said that she's the strongest member.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:03
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5/10
In my opinion custom character of Ezra can be really creative but u didnt put much efforts to make it creative
Hardly any flow as stated above
Comparing from the characters i have seen coming from u were better
Good luck next time

Edit : They said her ' the strongest women in fairy tail '
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:11
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Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.

Not all characters needs flow. 'Not very creative'? Have you seen the idea of using 3 different skills to replace the 4th skill anywhere? Really...

Bad skill names? Do I have to name them like the anime names? It's the idea of 'creativity'. I can name them as how i want, so they won't sound like the overused names. This is the meaning of the word 'creativity'.

Thank you for finding my grammar mistakes.

Hmm physical? Why? She uses magic to summon the armor + the weapon, so the weapon is made of magic, as result, it should be classed as 'magic'.

Indeed, that skill is ranged. I'll fix that a bit later.


So, this character deserves just a 6/10?
That's the rate that you give to the characters of the starters that really looks like our in-game characters, but, well, thank you anyways for leaving this comment, even if I don't think that all of it should be true.

gogetajss4 wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10

In the first episodes, when she first came back to fairy tail, they said that she's the strongest member.

It's not even that creative of an idea, and the skills that replace the 4th skill aren't creative.

The skills would be better if they were named correctly, as they sound better than the names you have used, and are also accurate.

She physically hits things. It's a Physical skill. The reason Flame Empress armor and Heavenly Wheel are okay as Magic is because she uses magic to create the attacks, where as in her Purgatory Armor she creates the weapon and armor with magic and then hits things with the physical embodiment of the weapon, which makes it a physical attack..

Yes, just a 6/10. That's my rate, if you don't like it then don't. I think it deserves a 6/10 because of the mistakes I have previously listed.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:14
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7/10
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:39
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naruto-turl wrote:
5/10
In my opinion custom character of Ezra can be really creative but u didnt put much efforts to make it creative
Hardly any flow as stated above
Comparing from the characters i have seen coming from u were better
Good luck next time

Edit : They said her ' the strongest women in fairy tail '

ouch...

thank you, I guess..

koskillz:

okay, you're right, thank you for the comments.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:44
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I find your character reallly good Sofi,i don't know why you people think is not creative,at least from me,never seen that kind of techniques.

About names,not is necesary keep the names,she tried to make something original aswell with this instead the overused names that everybody uses.

U did a good job Sofi,keep making characters,i love them.
9.5/10.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 15:55
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#10
Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.

Not all characters needs flow. 'Not very creative'? Have you seen the idea of using 3 different skills to replace the 4th skill anywhere? Really...

Bad skill names? Do I have to name them like the anime names? It's the idea of 'creativity'. I can name them as how i want, so they won't sound like the overused names. This is the meaning of the word 'creativity'.

Thank you for finding my grammar mistakes.

Hmm physical? Why? She uses magic to summon the armor + the weapon, so the weapon is made of magic, as result, it should be classed as 'magic'.

Indeed, that skill is ranged. I'll fix that a bit later.


So, this character deserves just a 6/10?
That's the rate that you give to the characters of the starters that really looks like our in-game characters, but, well, thank you anyways for leaving this comment, even if I don't think that all of it should be true.

gogetajss4 wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10

In the first episodes, when she first came back to fairy tail, they said that she's the strongest member.
They said she's the strongest female member.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 16:00
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miskos3 wrote:
Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.

Not all characters needs flow. 'Not very creative'? Have you seen the idea of using 3 different skills to replace the 4th skill anywhere? Really...

Bad skill names? Do I have to name them like the anime names? It's the idea of 'creativity'. I can name them as how i want, so they won't sound like the overused names. This is the meaning of the word 'creativity'.

Thank you for finding my grammar mistakes.

Hmm physical? Why? She uses magic to summon the armor + the weapon, so the weapon is made of magic, as result, it should be classed as 'magic'.

Indeed, that skill is ranged. I'll fix that a bit later.


So, this character deserves just a 6/10?
That's the rate that you give to the characters of the starters that really looks like our in-game characters, but, well, thank you anyways for leaving this comment, even if I don't think that all of it should be true.

gogetajss4 wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10

In the first episodes, when she first came back to fairy tail, they said that she's the strongest member.
They said she's the strongest female member.

Okay, okay, my bad.

I'm really really sorry for that mistake.

konohafenix wrote:
I find your character reallly good Sofi,i don't know why you people think is not creative,at least from me,never seen that kind of techniques.

About names,not is necesary keep the names,she tried to make something original aswell with this instead the overused names that everybody uses.

U did a good job Sofi,keep making characters,i love them.
9.5/10.

♥ thank you, my Kono

koskillz wrote:
Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.

Not all characters needs flow. 'Not very creative'? Have you seen the idea of using 3 different skills to replace the 4th skill anywhere? Really...

Bad skill names? Do I have to name them like the anime names? It's the idea of 'creativity'. I can name them as how i want, so they won't sound like the overused names. This is the meaning of the word 'creativity'.

Thank you for finding my grammar mistakes.

Hmm physical? Why? She uses magic to summon the armor + the weapon, so the weapon is made of magic, as result, it should be classed as 'magic'.

Indeed, that skill is ranged. I'll fix that a bit later.


So, this character deserves just a 6/10?
That's the rate that you give to the characters of the starters that really looks like our in-game characters, but, well, thank you anyways for leaving this comment, even if I don't think that all of it should be true.

gogetajss4 wrote:
koskillz wrote:
6/10.

Not really any flow it's just going from skill to skill to skill.
Not very creative.
In 'Sinister Darkness Armor' she's wearing Black Wing armor and in Black Horizontal Rampage she's wearing Purgatory Armor.

Bad skill names:
Fire Lightly -> Flame Empress
Sinister Darkness -> Black Wing
Heavenly Light -> Heaven's Wheel

Grammar mistakes:
7th skill: weel (wheel), his (her), the (that).

Classes:
Black Horizontal Rampage should be Physical, not Magic.
Heavenly Lightning Slash should be Ranged, not Melee.
This, some of the skills and descrpition are wrong like Erza isn't the strongest in Fairy Tail, Gildarts is

8.5/10

In the first episodes, when she first came back to fairy tail, they said that she's the strongest member.

It's not even that creative of an idea, and the skills that replace the 4th skill aren't creative.

The skills would be better if they were named correctly, as they sound better than the names you have used, and are also accurate.

She physically hits things. It's a Physical skill. The reason Flame Empress armor and Heavenly Wheel are okay as Magic is because she uses magic to create the attacks, where as in her Purgatory Armor she creates the weapon and armor with magic and then hits things with the physical embodiment of the weapon, which makes it a physical attack..

Yes, just a 6/10. That's my rate, if you don't like it then don't. I think it deserves a 6/10 because of the mistakes I have previously listed.

I didn't watched those episodes.

I'm sorry for that wrong armor in the alterntae skill. I just though that she has an anrmor for every time of elements. I just watched the first 5 episodes.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 19:20
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Erza is not the strongest person in Fairy Tail. There's Makarov, Laxus, Mystogan, Gildarts. She's the strongest woman in Fairy Tail.
I didn't like the concept and needs more flow.
6.5/10
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 20:15
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KaanKashi wrote:
Erza is not the strongest person in Fairy Tail. There's Makarov, Laxus, Mystogan, Gildarts. She's the strongest woman in Fairy Tail.
I didn't like the concept and needs more flow.
6.5/10

Okay. I understand.

Thank you for the post.
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  Posted on August 3, 2013 20:30
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10/10 :noworry


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Isaki-kun wrote:
10/10 :noworry


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