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  Posted on June 29, 2013 11:54
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~All by me do not RIP ideas or pics.
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 11:58
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pretty good 9/10 :amused
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:03
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very nice 8/10:amused
  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:07
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:09
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Nice character :)
9/10
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:10
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Wow thanks for the good rates!
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:24
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Grammar: 10/10.
Flawless grammar. No mistakes in it.

Pictures: 10/10.
The pictures are also nice and have a good quality.

Skills: 8.5/10.
She's a bit OP and not so original.
- 2nd skill: The cooldown should be 4 turns. If you want the cooldown to be only 2 turns, the cost should be 1 specific and 1 random chakra.
- 3rd skill: Should cost 1 more random chakra and should have 1 turn cooldown if used on an enemy affected by Protective Cloth.

Overall: 9.5/10.
Good job. Keep it up. :amused
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:29
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What's with the first skill?
75% to her team for 1 turn for that cost is okay, but the cooldown?
Make it last for 2 turns or reduce the cooldown to 2/3.

The second skill is okay, but if it last for 4 turns, and it has 2 turns of cooldown, you should write that the opponent target by it can not be target by it again until it ends.

The third skill is the same as in-game.
Same damage dealt and same cost.
You should do it more original in my opinion.
Like 40 piercing damage for 2 ninjtsu chakra and stun for 2/3 cooldowns.

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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:38
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Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
What's with the first skill?
75% to her team for 1 turn for that cost is okay, but the cooldown?
Make it last for 2 turns or reduce the cooldown to 2/3.

The second skill is okay, but if it last for 4 turns, and it has 2 turns of cooldown, you should write that the opponent target by it can not be target by it again until it ends.

The third skill is the same as in-game.
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Same damage dealt and same cost.
You should do it more original in my opinion.
Like 40 piercing damage for 2 ninjtsu chakra and stun for 2/3 cooldowns.

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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:48
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Akatsuki_Sofia wrote:
What's with the first skill?
75% to her team for 1 turn for that cost is okay, but the cooldown?
Make it last for 2 turns or reduce the cooldown to 2/3.

The second skill is okay, but if it last for 4 turns, and it has 2 turns of cooldown, you should write that the opponent target by it can not be target by it again until it ends.

The third skill is the same as in-game.
Same damage dealt and same cost.
You should do it more original in my opinion.
Like 40 piercing damage for 2 ninjtsu chakra and stun for 2/3 cooldowns.

Thanks but i need a rate!
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:49
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1st skill and 3rd skill little op and pics r mq
8/10
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 12:50
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 13:17
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nundaime-hokage wrote:
1st skill and 3rd skill little op and pics r mq
8/10
You can't say pics are MQ.I did my best.
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  Posted on June 29, 2013 13:24
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pics are oversharpened and have bad cropping sorry. but your character is nice and creative. real good job there 8/10.
  Posted on June 29, 2013 15:01
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I think the first skill you should lower the damage reduction and the cooldown, maybe a 50% or even 25% damage reduction that can't be pierced (in the case of 25% only one nin for the cost) with a 2 turn cooldown? Also there's no need to add "Until triggered" to the skill, since it isn't a countering skill it would never be triggered. Just saying the skill is invisible should be enough.
Protective Cloth is overpowered, maybe make it so that they deal 5 less damage for 2-3 turns, since the cooldown is 2 and the skill lasts 4 turns.
Binding Cloth when used with Protective Cloth is an instant 35 piercing with a 1 turn stun that has no cooldown, that should be nerfed too.
6.5/10