Menma


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  Posted on June 14, 2013 13:56
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:08
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- Summoning: OP, should cost 1 specific chakra.
- Bijuu Dama: No cooldown?
- Dai Rasenringu: No cooldown again. Should have 4 turns cooldown.

He should have a mission requirement to unlock. There are some grammar mistakes, 8/10.
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:08
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#3
Some grammar errors
2nd skill uses a different font from the rest. Consistency is important.
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:17
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many mistakes, including missing cd.
OP, and kind of boring, no flow

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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:17
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nice character but some grammar errors here otherwise 7/10
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:23
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 14:25
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#7
1 st skill grammar fixed version:
Menma uses his summoning technique, this he gains 75% of damage reduction and his skills will deal 10 more piercing damage for 4 turns.


To lazy for others shortly sayd

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  Posted on June 14, 2013 15:03
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6/10 e.e
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  Posted on June 14, 2013 15:09
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alot to errors that has been explained to u 7/10
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  Posted on June 17, 2013 09:52
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#10
You are classing the third skill as a chakra skill and it uses a taijutsu chakra and a random?
The 'great spiralling ball' used by menma is actually the opposite of naruto's rasengan. That dosen't mean that their costs are opisite aswell.
Should be a ninjtusu and a random chakra.
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  Posted on June 17, 2013 13:10
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  Posted on July 26, 2013 19:07
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Grammar errors and missing cooldowns, 7/10
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  Posted on August 2, 2013 17:24
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7/10 good :nuts
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  Posted on August 2, 2013 18:25
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5 / 10 is not good
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  Posted on August 11, 2013 13:18
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6/10 ..... not good work