The Tree (poem)


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  Posted on March 22, 2013 23:51
-TireFiger-
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I'm walking through the forest my gun in hand. My eyes spot a bear his feet help him stand, but I have no fear I want to be near, and as I move closer I realize it is a deer. I don't shoot, instead I steer my way closer to the deer. Suddenly I see the deer is not a deer anymore; now it's just a mere rat or is it a cat? No, way too fat to be a cat it must be a tiger; tired, I'm tired of guessing I ran faster than ever before i wanted to get to the core of this mystery. When I got to what I thought was a bee it was sadly nothing more than a tree. But wait how can this be? As I drop my gun from my hand and hear it land I now understand. This is no tree! It is me! No! It is we! Humanity!

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  Posted on March 22, 2013 23:57
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u should write a poem in it format not like a text. so we can understand the strofes better.
Anyways I like it. 9
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  Posted on March 23, 2013 00:00
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Poetry is usually centered, Prose is usually in paragraph form(what you did).
No line breaks, no obvious type of style used, half decent imagery, if anything a really short story with a flimsy plot.

carrots/10.

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