Edo Tensei Yondaime Kazekage (S) || By Rasengan_89


 Topic: Edo Tensei Yondaime Kazekage (S) || By Rasengan_89
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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:10
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#1

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Hello there.
Comments like "Bad skills" "6.1/10" "wtf lol" will be ignored.
RATE AND COMMENT PLEASE, EXPLAIN RATE UNDER 8.5

Chakra Usage: 0 - 3 - 0 - 1 - 2




Here you are some notes before you comment:
- About the facepic
I can't improve it more than this. If anyone can do it better, please send me the face pic and I will change it immediately
- About the pics
I did my best, I am a newbie in making very small pictures, esp in HQ
- About the skills
Just define OP and UP and how should I change it.
- About the grammar
If you find any mistake, report it so I can fix that. I am Italian, you woul help me in improving my English
- About the CnC
I want to read them. Without them I cant improve the character and myself

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- Rasengan_89 (me) for editing the pictures and making the characters.


Average rate: x/10 Based upon the x rates
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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:19
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The FP need more zoom (just a little)

and dont has a specific idea, and the flow.. meh

and i see a little OP, just a bit

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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:25
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Ehm... he is supposed to be a supportive/defensive character
And I guess I created enough flow.
About him being op? lol, you should have defined it.

You are becoming a post hunter :\

@below me: ignored, ty
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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:25
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7.5
  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:35
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You could find a better FP. I also wnated to creat him and while watching I've noticed very good shot where he has good face position which will fit FP. Somewhy o\pics seem to be a bit blur.

As to the character, I can't say it is original and creative, yea it has nice flow (for me as a supportive) and it is a way OP due to the improvement of the 3d skill (is better make a limit or remind it as you can remove 3 action skills from you for instance and then he will deal 30 piercing damage in one turn and then 15 in the next turn for only 1 blood!)

And I also would say that 1st skill is more chakra than physical.

On the whole it is good work, so 8/10

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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:41
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POST HUNTER!?

IS NOT TRUE! DDDDDD:<

and well, maybe just the stun effect + no cooldown.. but has a specific cost.. so..

And with second, is better action e.e

~By Kenny

  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:52
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Narutorazengan25 wrote:
POST HUNTER!?
IS NOT TRUE! DDDDDD:<
and well, maybe just the stun effect + no cooldown.. but has a specific cost.. so..
And with second, is better action e.e

~By Kenny


I wanted the second skill to be instant due to its cost and cooldown. I was thinking to make it action, but I would have reduced the CD as well.

stalkersom wrote:
You could find a better FP. I also wnated to creat him and while watching I've noticed very good shot where he has good face position which will fit FP. Somewhy o\pics seem to be a bit blur.
As to the character, I can't say it is original and creative, yea it has nice flow (for me as a supportive) and it is a way OP due to the improvement of the 3d skill (is better make a limit or remind it as you can remove 3 action skills from you for instance and then he will deal 30 piercing damage in one turn and then 15 in the next turn for only 1 blood!)
And I also would say that 1st skill is more chakra than physical.
On the whole it is good work, so 8/10

I think I know what are you referring for, about the FP. But I thought the forehead was too much cut.
is this one you meant?
I might use it.
Regarding the skills, I will add 1 turn CD to the first skill and reduce the improvement by 1 turn in the 3rd skill.

I thought it was very original :\
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  Posted on January 25, 2013 21:59
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i think is better action, and less cooldown o.o

and that FP is better

~By Kenny

  Posted on January 25, 2013 22:04
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Changed FP
1 skill: added 1 turn CD
2nd skill: From Instant to Action, from 5 to 4 turns CD
3rd skill: improves the 1st only for 1 turn

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  Posted on January 25, 2013 22:13
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Good job,10/10 from me,cause it's on my style
  Posted on January 26, 2013 09:25
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Thanks, I hope you actually read the character ò_ò
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  Posted on January 26, 2013 10:06
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Yea, now is much better)

Edited rate: 9/10

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  Posted on January 26, 2013 10:36
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Well....

Rating:


-Pretty balanced, and I really liked the third skill.

- The flow is decent

- I think the first skill is a little UP, remove the cooldown, it's not needed, since It deals low damage and the skills that improve it is kinda costly with long cooldowns, so 1 turn of cooldown to this skill is not needed.

Overall: 8.5/10
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  Posted on January 26, 2013 10:54
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6/10 could be better

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  Posted on January 26, 2013 12:22
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zygis471 wrote:
6/10 could be better
Ignored.

@sanin, thanks.
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