Power Mode Naruto (S) (Power Arc) + Mission

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3 vote(s) since January 12, 2013 12:18

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:18

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~Rate and CnC.
~If your rate is under 8 please explain or will be ignored
~If you find grammar mistakes please tell me and show if possible

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~If you don't like it, please help me to improve him
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Edit: The char's title was changed. Grammar mistakes were corrected. Alternate skills were changed (the 2nd was put out and the first was corrected). 1st, 2nd, 3d skills were corrected and improved. Description was added to the 4th skill. Mission was added.

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:24

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Correct the grammar errors first man. I understand some of it, but that grammar needs to be fixed in order for me to make a good comment on this character.

From what I can understand, its that it is a synchronized character, but don't give an effect after an invulnerable skill.

For me, it kinda looks like Rasengan_89's character before I gave him some of the suggestions.

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:25

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all skills have too much to read that makes it -2
boring and hard to understand char -1
unbalanced -1
grammar mistakes

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:27

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BUBBLECHEWs wrote:

Rasengan_89 made his char after mine had been posted. As to mistakes - please ignore them or show me them as I am from Russia and not so good at English!

Edit: the 2nd skill's effect was improved by ignoring effects in order to make it usable after he stays alone without his allies.

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:29

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to me honestly i rate a character high if there are unique effects with minimized reading. this one for example has several readings requirement

and i spot some grammar errors

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:30

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stalkersom wrote:

BUBBLECHEWs wrote:

Rasengan_89 made his char after mine had been posted. As to mistakes - please ignore them or show me them as I am from Russia and not so good at English!
Edit: the 2nd skill's effect was improved by ignoring effects in order to make it usable after he stays alone without his allies.

Maybe bolding the after effects after every school so that it isn't confusing for the reader to read.

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:30

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:35

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-Sweet! wrote:

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all skills have too much to read that makes it -2
boring and hard to understand char -1
unbalanced -1
grammar mistakes

maybe they are too much to read but I have made them more original and more usable in the battle. While using them you can go different ways. Such ways I've shown in those skills. What is more nearly all posted chars are like my one. You can say that they are all boring???

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:42

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guy220 wrote:

to me honestly i rate a character high if there are unique effects with minimized reading. this one for example has several readings requirement

and i spot some grammar errors

you all speak about errors but don't want to show them! what is going on with all of you!?

Edit: sorry for a double post

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Posted on January 12, 2013 12:49

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#10

this commentary can be deleted, was created by mistake

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Posted on January 12, 2013 13:08

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8/10

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Posted on January 12, 2013 13:17

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UPDATE: it is less reading now + new alternate skill

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Posted on January 12, 2013 13:42

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#13

Your pics are amazing, some grammar mistakes (ill edit this post with fix if u need), more or less similar to the previous one you made, but better,
8.5/10

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Posted on January 12, 2013 14:16

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Rasengan_89 wrote:

Your pics are amazing, some grammar mistakes (ill edit this post with fix if u need), more or less similar to the previous one you made, but better,
8.5/10

thanks rasen) yea please show me where to edit)) i haven't greatly changed him, only added some new effects and corrected the old one)

Edit: do you have any ideas how to improve him? Maybe add one more skill which will replace Power Beast Mode when Naruto's allies will die, for example a skill with gaining one specific chakra with a limit of 2 or more uses?)

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Posted on January 12, 2013 22:31

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neeeeed rates peeeeeople!!!!!

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Power Mode Naruto (S) (Power Arc) + Mission

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