|||~Zaraki Kenpachi~||| (Gonna be Remade)


 Topic: |||~Zaraki Kenpachi~||| (Gonna be Remade)
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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:29
radarobert
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#1
here's my version of Zaraki Kenpachi, hope you like it

Notes
~rate and cnc below 8
~don't rip,spam,flame ideeas,pics etc.
~define OP/UP so I know what to change
~read it don't be lazy >.>


Edits
~Eyepatch Remove only has the DD and the skills change permanent, its effect activates only once when you first use it and can only be used once
~Dual Hand Strike: depending on the kind of damage the skill deals its class can be physical or reiatsu
~1st skill stuns 1 skill at each enemy not 2 skills at each enemy


Credits
~credit for template goes to Saber
~credit for pics goes to me :cool


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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:32
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#2
No flow.
Your characters have too much skills.
It's kinda balanced and the pics are not bad.
But they could be better.
Anyways, no flow, just random skills which makes me dislike him.
The idea is good too.
Bad grammar on some places.
1st skill is OP, indeed.
6.5/10
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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:32
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#3
OP. First skill is especially OP. some grammar mistakes. Original

8.5/10
  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:34
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#4
9.
  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:36
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#5
godbot wrote:
No flow.
Your characters have too much skills.
It's kinda balanced and the pics are not bad.
But they could be better.
Anyways, no flow, just random skills which makes me dislike him.
The idea is good too.
6.5/10

I'm gonna say, very agreed o.o

but only in the flow, originality is great

BUT MY KENPACHI IS BETTER!

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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:38
radarobert
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#6
godbot wrote:
No flow.
Your characters have too much skills.
It's kinda balanced and the pics are not bad.
But they could be better.
Anyways, no flow, just random skills which makes me dislike him.
The idea is good too.
Bad grammar on some places.
1st skill is OP, indeed.
6.5/10

I love making them with lots of skills
yeah didn't know what flow to put in it
sorry for the grammar
what is OP on the 1st skill? (define OP/UP so I know what to change)
thanks for the rate

@the others: thanks
  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:40
lilnaruto_legend
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#7
radarobert wrote:
godbot wrote:
No flow.
Your characters have too much skills.
It's kinda balanced and the pics are not bad.
But they could be better.
Anyways, no flow, just random skills which makes me dislike him.
The idea is good too.
Bad grammar on some places.
1st skill is OP, indeed.
6.5/10

I love making them with lots of skills
yeah didn't know what flow to put in it
sorry for the grammar
what is OP on the 1st skill? (define OP/UP so I know what to change)
thanks for the rate

@the others: thanks
Stunning 2 skills for 2 turns for that little cost is. The damage is just overkill.
  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:40
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#8
8/10 Nice joob. :amused
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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:41
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#9
Your pictures are way over sharpened

The first skill is OP without a doubt

To many skills for this character

Random skills that make the character boring

Original skills tho

That's pretty much it

6/10

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  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:45
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#10
8
  Posted on January 8, 2013 15:48
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#11
Adoro bastante o Kenpachi . Nota 10 / 10
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  Posted on January 8, 2013 20:19
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#12
9/10

A few grammar mistakes and the first skill is OP, but other than that he's a pretty interesting character with pretty unique skills.
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  Posted on January 9, 2013 04:20
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#13
8
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  Posted on January 9, 2013 12:45
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#14
ok I still don't understand why the first skill is OP, he stuns 2 random skills on 2 random enemies that means 1 skill at each enemy -_- what cost you want me to put 2 reiryouku?