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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:04
blueskull119
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#1
This is my first character hope u all would like it
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:11
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#2
Some grammar mistakes.
Bad pics.
Costy.
You can put one more cooldown on the 3rd skill. Its OP with this cooldown. Or just make the damage normal.
But for first is good.
6.5 Cause its first.
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:11
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Too OP is all i can say, chakra distribution is also pretty bad. Anyways good one, if you consider it to be your first. 5/10.
  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:12
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7.5.......................:wondering :worried
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:15
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#5
Very simple,Very boring.
No flow and no originality.
You coul try to make 1 skill's cost different.Because it's very chakra heavy.Youy should rework this char.
About the pics:The FP is good,but the other pics are very bad.
Don't like the balance at all.So:With this char you can do maximum 50 piercing+ stun for:1 random+1gen+2 bloods.Where in game with 5 chakras you can kill an enemy.
AGAIN.YOU SHOULD REWORK IT.I WON'T RATE because the rate would be pretty low and would make you quit making chars.(maybe)
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:18
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alex_naruto12 wrote:
Very simple,Very boring.
No flow and no originality.
You coul try to make 1 skill's cost different.Because it's very chakra heavy.Youy should rework this char.
About the pics:The FP is good,but the other pics are very bad.
Don't like the balance at all.So:With this char you can do maximum 50 piercing+ stun for:1 random+1gen+2 bloods.Where in game with 5 chakras you can kill an enemy.
AGAIN.YOU SHOULD REWORK IT.I WON'T RATE because the rate would be pretty low and would make you quit making chars.(maybe)
what do u suggest for the pics and what is it that u don't like in the pics is it the quality
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:19
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#7
Better than the current MS
7/10.
  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:23
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#8
thanks to u all i will be making more characters which will be better than this one and thank u for your attention
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:32
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#9
You know for a first this isnt half bad. The only problem is that you should put commas and end marks. Basicly the describtion is just 1 sentence. Also you should find a better site to upload the character.

7/10
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 12:49
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thanks to u all again
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  Posted on December 29, 2012 21:38
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#11
better the ingame one XD

7.9/10 for your first XP
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