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Posted on April 6, 2012 09:55

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Posted on April 6, 2012 09:58

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No invulnerable skill? :oh

Nice pictures, but a bit overpowered again. It's good though. :smile

8/10

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Posted on April 6, 2012 09:59

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mistakes that are really bad like on senutsu rasen u said move. its skill . on futn rasen u say the other will take like wtf
you have 2 counter skills on 1 character .
6/10

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Posted on April 6, 2012 10:01

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4/10

Posted on April 6, 2012 10:01

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MQ pics
Grammar Mistakes
Add more description
Bad misison name
No invulnerabillity?
It's almost the same as current one

5

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Posted on April 6, 2012 10:04

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Bro, it seems like you have another character every 15-30 minutes. A character isn't supposed to take that long to make. It's supposed to take a couple hours at the LEAST...

Put some more thought into your chars. Make them unique.

Found that from DCMAN. Good old R-L days. :)

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Posted on April 6, 2012 10:17

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Lower the cooldown on the first skill by 2.
So he's more versatile.

Second skill: The wording is alright. Just remove the "for one turn" thing. Considering you get it in your chakra pool for the duration of the game.

Third skill: Remove the random and make it 20 piercing damage. That would be the best ideal boost to the skill tbh.

Fourth skill: Remove the counter effect, a character with more than one counter effect is dull and unoriginal. Grammar mistakes too. Many.

Fifth skill: Grammar mistakes. How about making the skill 20 piercing damage, and adding the word "and" "or" won't cut it cause N-A's focus isn't randomizing the stuns. It's two or none.

Sixth skill: Pretty dull. It's lacking originality from your fifth skill. "Oh I target this character and another one takes lesser damage" Just make it cost something else considering your first skill already has it costing a nin. It's 3 ninjutsu chakra to pull that move off.

Grammar mistakes: 5/10
Originality: 7/10
Character picture: 8/10
Placement of skills and everything else: 6/10

26/40

Overall character: 6.1/10

Work on your grammar mistakes and all. Also balance it. Don't make characters too quickly. They're lacking originality.

That is all.

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Posted on April 6, 2012 13:09

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