Ponder Her

Lazy_Genius_13 Rank: member Forum Rank: Akatsuki Posts: 17427 Joined on: October 4, 2007

#1 Ratings and critique por favor, and here's my 2nd latest poem, it's still a rough draft but uses the rhythm and rhyme style of poetry. Ponder Her The light from her eyes, Broken only by her smile Time invested in her, Pulling for grin with guile If she'd flash a smile The shyest of a wink.. What else is there; To ponder, or think? When the sun glares, Her eyes gleam bright With voluminous gaze I wonder 'bout the night Would she still shine..? Bright and true With a moonlit smile, Would I continue, imbued Caught in her rapture In that shyest wink There I go, Once Again Of her... I think ¦¦ ℓαzу© ¦¦ Would you accompany me, to the edge of the sea... ¦¦ ¦¦Teams ¦ Etre le coup de foudre ¦ Foundations ¦¦

wilderbeast Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3169 Joined on: May 16, 2008

#2 10/10 Loved the last part, that was really nice, keep at it. Highest streak+21-+26 My Alt Sig by Enrike Bleed to feel GiftMy brute Noah gift Love~Life The bear necessities~Wink~ Ooopah

Ichigo-KT Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2615 Joined on: June 15, 2009

#3 Lazy you are a deep person.Congratulations on the fact that I give it a 10. Smoove Fam^^^TR^^^BC^^^I wanna tap Jenny Swanson-via RJ Berger

KingxBlazex Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4771 Joined on: September 15, 2008

#4 Wow dude this is awesome. loved the ending10/10 Pic Case || IntyMain || IntyRec || Yes Insanity Is Back Baby Tournaments Won:3 || Lates Won ||

-EliteVolocity- Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1837 Joined on: October 23, 2009

#5 Wow....Just wow...So amazing poetry

ts_faraz Rank: member Forum Rank: Akatsuki Posts: 8496 Joined on: June 1, 2009

#6 yes , LG, you are Genius, my favouroite MOD here.......i can't resist giving 10:amused <3 Eva . NEW !!! showcase omg crownzey ;3

dee195 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2946 Joined on: May 25, 2008

#7 it is pretty cool 10/10 ~You now have chlamydia. You're welcome. Love, Neli. Say, you know this person is cool ;3 -Mirrory SIGNING THIS SIG AGAIN CAUSE I CAN ~ Neli Third time's the charm. Sexy Gary gif-thing, by the way. ~ Neil

-Truth- Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 608 Joined on: April 13, 2009

#8 very nice. i love the use of vocab, your meter is nice and like many of the others have said the ending was beautiful. i do not rate poetry because i do not see how one could rate the contents of one's soul. but i do approve =P ~Masta� | DTP | Game Of Life | War | Freedom | Passion | Sublime - Sending messages through art

nuckleheadninja Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1798 Joined on: April 24, 2008

#9 Pretty nice, the pattern is simple, but your vocabulary was incredulously vast. I agree with masta about the rates though. Smile :) Beauty ~Sharky my darling, you've left this space so desolate~</3 No I didn't!. Stop assuming things. ~Sharky

-EliteVolocity- Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1837 Joined on: October 23, 2009

#10 Do more lazy:amazed

TwisterZaraku Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1450 Joined on: July 19, 2007

#11 Wow, just simply amazing. `The name is Johnathon. I am indeed Clanless. Avatar by ItachiUchiha12

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