Cursed's Poem

the_cursed91 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1708 Joined on: July 18, 2008

#1 This is my first poem in about 4 months so it's a bit choppy i'm sure and most def not my best. Just rate it and give me constructive criticism. Thanks. This is a double post from last last night. Only one person read it and I would like more feed back on it. Sorry if this is breaking a rule. This thing I want most in life, Is something that drips off the edge of this knife. What I crave, what I desire.. I'll keep pushing for it, higher and higher. Its simple really, this thing.. I know its stupid, but I can't help to cling. Its your respect, your life, your fucking acknowledgement. It hurts me, it poisons me, its my ailment. I know this will never come true. Its stupid to think it would accrue. I want your love father, nothing more. But you look through me like an open door. "Never speak to me again" you say. I'm sorry father, but I can't obey. One day I will achieve my goal. Of filling in my empty hole. You took a piece of me when you deserted me.. I will get you to respect me, you'll see. Until that day father.. I won't bother. Characters Unlocked:85/93 Missions Completed: D & C Rank: 10/10 B Rank: 11/11 A Rank: 13/13 S Rank: 4/7 Shippuden: 35/40 Current Rank: Chuunin Sig Made By: Me Avy Made By: Me

khaskislayer Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2143 Joined on: July 16, 2007

#2 Nice sig its nice Avy/Sig by-lucas_pen

andoskull Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4316 Joined on: August 24, 2007

#3 Wow, that is a deep poem. I can really feel your pain as I read this. ): 10/10 ||The true Ichigo whore|Andy™||igƒ?-?????||Back||?This Is True Love?|| ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ -||Ava by myself||-||Both Iconsig(s) by myself||- My Second CC :D||-||My little Brochacho||-||Bye Brosef||-

MOBJOBNARUTO Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3629 Joined on: August 8, 2008

#4 Wow, thats a really nice poem man. Very deep. 10/10. Avatar By: Cartoon11 II Gimp User II

ninjagangsta Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3469 Joined on: May 21, 2009

#5 10/10 great poem beginner gimper

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