Cold and heartless


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  Posted on March 9, 2010 07:47
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Rate and CnC this poem i wrote Tell me what you think And if you like it or not


When i was 16 i was cold and heartless
Everthing i did was selfish and wicked
I never cared for people for i was twisted,
I killed a man for calling me out
He was innocent but i went ahead and pulled it out,
I made a man cry for what he had said.
I bent over and put a gun right to his head.
He began to plead and cry
But in my eye he was nothing but a meaningless fly.
He was nothing to me and was worthless in all respect.
I was heartless with no intention of neglect
So i pulled the trigger and ended his life.
When i saw the glimmer in his eye when his cold body hit the floor
My mind went crazy and my words were a slurr

My homies look to me as the cold and heartless
Im the one they can count on as the cold hearted monster
I know no fear for i have none in mind
I dream of the life i had taken away
For it haunts me with no intention of going astray
I hold this thought in mind everynight
for i am still sixteen and had ended a life.

His life was not mine for to take
but i did anyway for my homies sake
I was in no right mind for what i had done
For i did it as a heartless son.
My father would be mad if he found out for he has done the same
without a doubt.
I have no intentions of letting this thought out of my mind
For it gives me a horrible fright
im scared of no light.

I am the one who is cold and heartless for i took a life and was a monster.

I just wish this all was a lie
that way i can sleep in peace and never cry.
Im in my room every night crying myself to sleep for that innocent life.

I need someone to confide in so i can let someone know.
Tell them how i feel and give god the life i owe.
What must i do to repent for my sin
Am i in the right if i turn myself in?
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  Posted on March 9, 2010 07:52
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its either you've posted this before
or someone else did because i've seen it before :oh

but yeah its alright for a second time around....
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  Posted on March 9, 2010 07:52
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sounds more like a short story styled poem, but i've heard plenty on the same subject. Try to be more creative, write about things people usually look over and ignore.
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  Posted on March 9, 2010 07:56
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Yes it is a second time posting this poem and i didn't think many people saw it before so i thought i'd give it another try.
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  Posted on March 9, 2010 08:07
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Its alright i guess.
And dontp ost it when theres only 15 people online.
  Posted on March 9, 2010 08:11
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i like it very dark :smile lol
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