A Storm Of Spiteful Ravens

UltimateGatsuga Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 901 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#1 This is my first posted N-A poem, but ive been writing for almost a year. A Storm Of Spiteful Ravens My eyes are gouged away again. The ravens had their feast. They can taste the blood on their tongue, the marrow in their teeth. Soaring, all the black wings. Plotting my demise. Asking me the question "Who do I despise?" And I answered back at them with hatred in my heart. "You are all i've hated. You've know that from the start" They all heard my screams of pain flooding the skies again. And all that's left of me still knows, that this might be the end.

arma11 Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 663 Joined on: December 9, 2008

#2 nice 9/10 keep it up:amused

Prince-Varengan Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2191 Joined on: December 7, 2009

#3 I like but but If u've written this for 1 year,in 10 years u can make 10 pages of a book for kids. I don't rate writings. The N-B's spam Prince presents... ||Ownage against Dark_Sannin ||Best Pein ever || I am ownage || Siggeh by me.

kylerocks1994 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4617 Joined on: July 12, 2009

#4 5.5 it's okk. say you just wanna shake hands with me. same fuck nigga that use to lauph at me ~ Credit to hyoung-kun for avy ~

UltimateGatsuga Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 901 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#5 Prince-Varengan wrote: I like but but If u've written this for 1 year,in 10 years u can make 10 pages of a book for kids. I don't rate writings. it didnt take me a year to write. i did it in 5 mins ive been writing poem in general for 1 year.

Nguba Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1915 Joined on: July 9, 2009

#6 7.5:amused Credit to Khaiz for my avatar D/C: 10/10 B: 11/11 A:13/13 S: 4/7 Shippuden 32/40 Credit to 6th for the sig

ninja744 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3976 Joined on: October 10, 2009

#7 7/10 It's not bad, though I'm not a fan of rhyming poems

neji_uchia95 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4677 Joined on: August 7, 2008

#8 arma11 wrote: nice 9/10 keep it up:amused Agree:rolleyes You Better ? 09-Early10 MoNsTeR ;] Late10-11 scrub...

UltimateGatsuga Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 901 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#9 i usually dont rhyme.. its just i figure you all would like it.. cus your guys opinoin is very important to me as a lyricist.

kabutoninja80 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 5125 Joined on: July 19, 2007

#10 Very good! nice job I am indeed a Programmer, if you have any questions, ask me. Why do we put so much effort into our lives, it's not like we're making alive out of it, because we all know death is hereditairy.

UltimateGatsuga Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 901 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#11 thanks man..

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