A Storm Of Spiteful Ravens


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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:24
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This is my first posted N-A poem, but ive been writing for almost a year.

A Storm Of Spiteful Ravens

My eyes are gouged away again. The ravens had their feast.
They can taste the blood on their tongue, the marrow in their teeth.
Soaring, all the black wings. Plotting my demise.
Asking me the question "Who do I despise?"

And I answered back at them with hatred in my heart.
"You are all i've hated. You've know that from the start"
They all heard my screams of pain flooding the skies again.
And all that's left of me still knows, that this might be the end.



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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:26
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nice 9/10 keep it up:amused
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:26
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I like but but If u've written this for 1 year,in 10 years u can make 10 pages of a book for kids.:oh
I don't rate writings.
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:26
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5.5 it's okk. :oh
say you just wanna shake hands with me. same fuck nigga that use to lauph at me

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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:28
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Prince-Varengan wrote:
I like but but If u've written this for 1 year,in 10 years u can make 10 pages of a book for kids.:oh
I don't rate writings.
it didnt take me a year to write. i did it in 5 mins ive been writing poem in general for 1 year.
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:28
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7.5:amused :amused
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:28
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7/10
It's not bad, though I'm not a fan of rhyming poems
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:29
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arma11 wrote:
nice 9/10 keep it up:amused
Agree:rolleyes
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:30
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i usually dont rhyme.. its just i figure you all would like it.. cus your guys opinoin is very important to me as a lyricist.
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:31
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Very good! nice job :amused
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  Posted on February 9, 2010 21:46
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thanks man.. :teeth
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