Naruto: Fox Sage shinobi (Fanfic story)


 Topic: Naruto: Fox Sage shinobi (Fanfic story)
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  Posted on December 31, 2009 12:33
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Chapter 1: The return of Sasuke Uchiha.

It was a calm day as Naruto the sixth hokage is at the training ground working on his own version of Chidori until the red alert alarm went off as out of the ground by ninja's teleportation appeared Sasuke Uchiha as Sasuke said "Hey loser I have returned to finally put an end of our rivalry meaning I am going to ake you a complete loser" then Naruto got a little angry as Naruto said "Sasuke Uchiha you jerk I am the sixth hokage and that means if I wanted to I could call some anbu black ops to arrest you but I will deal with you personally after all I prmised our team matee Sakura that I'll restore you back to normal plus now I have complete control of my demon your going to have no chice but to allow the curse mark to be removed".

After Naruto spoke Sasuke Uchiha summoned the snake suon monda as Naruto bit his thumb which Naruto slammed his hand down as Naruto yelled "demon summoning jutsu" which out of the summoning effect appeared the nine tail fox demon Kyuubi as the snake summon monda said "Sasuke I hope you have an offering for me because I hate being summoned" which Sasukle pointed to Naruto as Monda said "OK that foolish human will die and as for you foolish demon I will prevail while your host is dinner" which Kyuubi roared "Do you really think you are a match for me you foolish snake well I see no point of explaining my power so prepare to be sent to oblivion" so Kyuubi demonicly dashed to attack Mondu knowing that a fox is better than a snake.
Naruto X Hinata.
  Posted on December 31, 2009 12:40
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I believe it aint mondu its Manda and you need to improve on your flow of the story, its very boring as its full of boring quotes. 6/10.
  Posted on December 31, 2009 13:01
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Chapter 2: Monda vs Kyuubi.

After Kyuubi attacked Monda Naruto said "OK nine tail fox you hold on while I prepare a jutsu that is directed by my father your former foe the 4th hokage" then as Naruto made some hand signs Kyuubi blasted Monda with a ray of pure chakra which Monda got seriously hurt as Naruto did his final hand sign as Naruto yelled "ninja art thunder god strike" which Naruto striked Monda with a fearful force of Naruto's jutsu so Monda died to defeat as Kyuubi placed Naruto safe as Kyuubi returned to the 4th hokage seal knowing it is nearly time for Naruto most special jutsu.

After Kyuubi returned to his seal Naruto dashed as Naruto made some hand signs then Naruto yelled "ninja art curse mark removal jutsu" which Naruto made a mini rasengan which Naruto striked Sasuke Uchiha right on the curse mark as Naruto caused enough electrical shock that the curse mark with the dark powers of the curse mark was completely removed so Naruto looked at Sasuke as Naruto said "Sasuke Uchiha do tell me what I am to you" which Sasuke Uchiha looked back at Naruto as Sasuke Uchiha replied "Naruto you are my friend and I see that your finally the hokage well I would be honored if us the former team 7 go on a mission together but first take me to the midcal centre of a healing treatment".
Naruto X Hinata.
  Posted on December 31, 2009 13:08
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1: cliche.
2: booooriiiiing.
sorry, dude, didn't like it at all. 2/10
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  Posted on December 31, 2009 14:51
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Moved to Writing Class. Please keep personal works out of the literature section.
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  Posted on January 1, 2010 12:22
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(Thank you for moving it to the right place.)

Chapter 3: Death to the Akasuki.

After Sasuke Uchiha spoke Naruto looked at Sasuke calmly Hinata arrived in the scene as Hinata said "Lord Hokage Naruto I have recieved word from your anbu black op neji that the akasuki is attacking the hidden and village plus it seems they want the tailed demon Shukaku but why" then Naruto replied "Garaa is juts like me because as Garaa is the host of the sand spirit demon Shukaku I am the host of the nine tail fox demon Kyuubi plus that is why I have these wisker marks along with a 4th hokage seal" so Naruto got up knowing a reunion with Garaa will be a mission.

After Naruto got up Naruto said "OK you three have got a mission with me and our mission is an S rank mission meaning we have to protect the kazekage Garaa as he is a demon brother of mine" then Sasuke replied "that means my evil brother Itachi will be there well I will go with you on this mission" which Hinata said "I love you Naruto and I'll go with you to protect you like we'll protect Garaa" which Sakura agreed as the four dashed right over to he hidden sand village where a battle will begin.
Naruto X Hinata.