Sparkling Snow by James

Omegaitachi Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 5401 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#1 What makes it so, That it can sparkle, oh? What makes it so, That it can gleam bright, no? What makes snow, Sparkle so, In the light of the moon? What makes snow, Gleam bright with awe and amazement, In the shining crater of the white ball? Sparkling snow, On the ground. It shines, Bright and strong, Making people notice, Even without a sound. Little rainbow diamonds, Shining mightily in the night. Gleaming snow, Awe gaping with every start. Shining, Gleaming, Sparkling, Glimmering, Glowing, Oh so majestically, no? Rate and CnC

YehsreH Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 84 Joined on: November 15, 2009

#2 kinda messy but be creative more and and add flow.. 5/10 ? // I was once a bad girl. But I changed. I hope you'd all forgive me. // I didn't change actually, I just grew up. And I learned to get a life. Thanks a bunch to the moderating staff for the signature.

pickcha Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1771 Joined on: February 13, 2007

#3 7/10 its Awesome Made By: heavens-punisher <.< Click

Rena_Ryuuguu Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4088 Joined on: July 10, 2007

#4 YehsreH wrote: kinda messy but be creative more and and add flow.. 5/10 how can a poem be messy? X_X @.@ Top:Hallow1 Bottum:LightningBlade5 Avater by Sei Be gentle with me hehe ^_^

affan6338(s) Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1107 Joined on: December 6, 2009

#5 pickcha wrote: 7/10 its Awesome yeh ....::::+13..::::....Sig By Dead_Player:... ::...

YehsreH Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 84 Joined on: November 15, 2009

#6 Rena_Ryuuguu wrote: YehsreH wrote: kinda messy but be creative more and and add flow.. 5/10 how can a poem be messy? X_X @.@ If you write poems too you could see it through combination of words... ? // I was once a bad girl. But I changed. I hope you'd all forgive me. // I didn't change actually, I just grew up. And I learned to get a life. Thanks a bunch to the moderating staff for the signature.

Omegaitachi Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 5401 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#7 YehsreH wrote: Rena_Ryuuguu wrote: YehsreH wrote: kinda messy but be creative more and and add flow.. 5/10 how can a poem be messy? X_X @.@ If you write poems too you could see it through combination of words... Poems don't have to rythme, and in this sense, no poem can truly be messy. If you claim all poems must rythme, then ur not a true poet/poet reader:oh

YehsreH Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 84 Joined on: November 15, 2009

#8 Omegaitachi wrote: YehsreH wrote: Rena_Ryuuguu wrote: YehsreH wrote: kinda messy but be creative more and and add flow.. 5/10 how can a poem be messy? X_X @.@ If you write poems too you could see it through combination of words... Poems don't have to rythme, and in this sense, no poem can truly be messy. If you claim all poems must rythme, then ur not a true poet/poet reader:oh that's not what i meant... you need to analyze more.. possibly think first before you say something And if you can't take real Constructive criticism then why ask for it? and there's no such thing as a true poet neither a false poet... a poet is a poet if one has enough skills to be called a poet..... ? // I was once a bad girl. But I changed. I hope you'd all forgive me. // I didn't change actually, I just grew up. And I learned to get a life. Thanks a bunch to the moderating staff for the signature.

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