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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:37

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Here's a little bit of a chapter of a story I'm writing, it's mostly just a prologue for the rest of the story. No Rates need, just CnC please.

P.S Do not say it is too long and that you won't read it. That will be considered spam.

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�Where am I? Is this a dream?� I screamed out to the shadows but no one answers, it remains silent.

I frantically start turning in circles looking for something, anything that could help me find out where I am but in every direction I look, there�s only darkness.

I can�t see my body and when I feel myself lifting my hand, I can�t see it, only darkness.

It�s cold. So cold and dark. I�m terrified. I feel like it�s becoming darker but my body feels warmer though nothing changes. It�s warm. I�m so tired, I�m so tired �

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BEEP
BEEP
BEEP

�AHHHH� I screamed as I was suddenly awoken.

�So it was a dream? It felt so real� I thought as I started to get ready for school. I quickly brushed my teeth and had a shower before getting dressed in my school uniform. This uniform usually consisted of a black and crimson thigh-length plaid skirt, plain black collared shirt with or without sleeves, a black or midnight red tie (depending on what TYPE of student you were) and black fighting shoes. Student�s that attended this particular school never followed this dress code and instead used it as a guideline. I was no different.

I add to this uniform a black and silver short-spiked necklace with a kunai pendent that doubles as a weapon (what kind of weapon? I�ll never tell), three black-silver bracelets on each wrist, a black-silver ring with a tiny jade diamond in the centre and 5 inch black high-heals. A habit I picked up from my father apparently. I also wear black spandex shorts instead of a skirt but I don�t wear a tie.

As I started to walk to school, I thought about all the hard-work I had to do in order to get accepted.

You see Shadow Academy (otherwise known as SA) is no ordinary school, it is a boarding school that homes both humans and ANGELS if need be. That�s what makes SA so prestigious. The fact that it houses Angels and it is also VERY hard to be accepted. It is proved by only having 680 students (a majority being Angels), when SA can board around 6000 student�s. In order to be accepted you must first complete three trials.

In the first trial you�ll have to complete a test of knowledge. This will test how intelligent you are with both human and Angel society, as well as everyday subjects you would learn in a public school. This task would take an average human 9 hours alone to complete only the public subjects but candidates for SA are given 5 hours to complete everything.

On the chance you complete that trial, you will be taken to training area 226 in order to complete a physical exam. In this rocky and dry terrain, you will have to run 200 laps around a 1600 metre field, do 300 push-ups and sit-ups each and do 250 squats while wearing 40 kilograms. You�ll be given 7 hours to complete it all. This trial will test your physical endurance and will also act as a warm-up for the final trial. Very few humans pass this stage.

The final stage of the trials are the most difficult, not only do you have to fight the current P.E/fighting teacher but you have to land three hits on him/her as well. Most of you are probably saying, Three hits? That�s all? Well let me tell you this, the P.E/fighting teacher is usually the best hand-to-hand fighter in the whole school. Not always but usually is. This trial is especially hard for Angels, because they are forbidden from using their powers during this part of the exam. Another factor to include is: You have to land three hits on him/her before they land 15 cuts on you.

I excelled through all three of the trials with ease, even though I was not exactly apart of an Angel bloodline. I bet your wondering who I am. Well, I�ll tell you.

I am the girl with ethereal natural midnight blue hair and deep Lavender eyes that surprisingly don�t clash. I have an hour glass figure that has many males lusting after me and creamy tanned skin that is at every girls envy. I am sinfully gorgeous and I know it, yet I never flaunt it. I am truly beautiful inside and out, or so I am told. I am intelligent and strong at the young age of 17, yet I have shed blood, wept and sweat since the tender age of 3 to achieve this and my goals. I am considered human yet I have unnatural blood flowing through my veins. I am not a descendant of Angel heritage. I am the only child of two outcasts.

My name is simply Setsuke and nothing else.

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:39

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:40

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Nice 9.5/10

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:41

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I like this 8.5/10.

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:41

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kl u should become a book writer:smile

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:49

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this is only my opinion and I know that I won't be ale even to write 3 lines.Nontheless i think I read a lot of books in my life.
the last paragraph was the only one that caught my atention.
But I wasn't impressed by te others.What are the angels and their powers?and I think the name itself sounds to farfetched.
You started really nice but then you throw something like training camp and angels and other.
I think you would do better i you would write something about everyday life and teeenagers, etc. not the fanatasy stuff.
Soryy if you find my opinion rude:embarressed

Posted on December 16, 2009 18:51

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you used the name I gave you!!!!<3<3<3<3<3
I feal so honored!!! :amazed

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:54

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uzumaki_george wrote:

Nah it's alright and definitely not offensive. This chapter is just supposed to be a filler chapter. The thing with this is to bring out the difficulty of getting accepted into a school like this one. Teenages and everyday life problems will also come into this in later chapters but so far this is just a base. I have more written but from the POV of someone else which isn't going to be named yet. That part is not quite finished but soon it will.

My writing style will change when I do the POV of the other person as is has to change to suit his personality :amused

. Also what name do you think will sound better?

EDIT: @Yin: Yepp:teeth and thank you for the name as well. I looked up the meaning of it and found that it suited my character perfectly.

I also used the name of the academy from my dream that I had lol

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Posted on December 16, 2009 18:59

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Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

EDIT: @Yin: Yepp:teeth and thank you for the name as well. I looked up the meaning of it and found that it suited my character perfectly.

I also used the name of the academy from my dream that I had lol

speaking of dreams, I sended you the meaning of yours, go check it :amused

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Posted on December 16, 2009 19:00

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i like this

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

�Where am I? Is this a dream?� I screamed out to the shadows but no one answers, it remains silent.

reminded me of kindom hearts!

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

My name is simply Setsuke and nothing else.

setsuke means fixed current, rapid, or fast moving river, name goes with the story, Good Job

10/10

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Posted on December 16, 2009 19:04

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r_starks wrote:

i like this

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

�Where am I? Is this a dream?� I screamed out to the shadows but no one answers, it remains silent.

reminded me of kindom hearts!

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

My name is simply Setsuke and nothing else.

setsuke means fixed current, rapid, or fast moving river, name goes with the story, Good Job

10/10

It does too. I just noticed that lol

@Yin: Yea I checked my messages :amused

@Everyone: Thank you all so much :teeth

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Posted on December 16, 2009 19:07

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Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

r_starks wrote:

i like this

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

�Where am I? Is this a dream?� I screamed out to the shadows but no one answers, it remains silent.

reminded me of kindom hearts!

Namida_No_Sakura wrote:

My name is simply Setsuke and nothing else.

setsuke means fixed current, rapid, or fast moving river, name goes with the story, Good Job

10/10

It does too. I just noticed that lol

@Yin: Yea I checked my messages :amused

@Everyone: Thank you all so much :teeth

you're welcome :amused

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Posted on December 16, 2009 19:09

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Nice story even though its a prolouge, Hope to see more from you.
9/10 :amused

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Posted on December 17, 2009 05:23

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- Nice Story

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Posted on December 18, 2009 14:49

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Wow, you write so well, Nami. I love it. Message me when you update, okay? ^^

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