Shining nights


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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:50
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I am back to writing happy poems instead of my usual antagonist stuff.
I have found an inspiration worth wrtiting about too.

It's free verse, and not that structered. Screw structure though, i wasn't trying to write a standout poem, i simply wanted to express my feelings.


The brightest star of the night sky
is called Sirius.
However, the brightest star of my night
goes by the name of Kayla.

I am but a simple dreamer.
Only she can turn my dreams into realities.
She can make my dreams light up like the city lights,
even on the darkest of nights.

The moment i start talking to her,
all the bad thoughts cease to exist from my mind
and my life shines again
even if only for the moment.

I like to imagine myself lying under
the night sea of stars, smiling with her.
Not giving a care for the troubles
of the outside world
because she is my world
my night skies and my full moon.
The mere thought of her
is enough to keep my world spinning around.

Knowing she loves me
is the greatest feeling possible
nothing can even begin to compare.
And the only thing i can do for her
is tell her "I love you"
and hope that i have returned the exact same feeling.

I love my shining star.


Comments, ratings and constructive critism is appreciated.
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:51
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49/100 :oh It was pretty good. (SMIRK) Smirkin-3.gif
  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:52
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YukiUzamaki_2 wrote:
49/100 :oh It was pretty good. (SMIRK) Smirkin-3.gif
Poems aren't my specialty, stories are.
God those smirks are annoying..
I mean err..thanks for commenting. =)
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:54
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Not bad it was worth reading 7/10 .
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:54
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I LOVE it Alex!
9/10. <333
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:54
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y does n-b even have a section 4 writing poems :huh :sick
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:56
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Rawr-Its-Melia wrote:
Omfg!
I like it. =)
9/10. <3
Glad you like it. <3

@Kaiza:
Because your Mommy abuses your Daddy. :oh
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 22:56
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It's wonderful and beautiful, Alex. Amazing job.
  Posted on November 28, 2009 23:37
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We all deserve our own shining star..and you have found yours :amused Very good Alex. 9/10
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  Posted on November 28, 2009 23:39
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Thanks Dokina. Yes, i have. :embarressed

Thanks Bubbles. <3
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  Posted on February 11, 2010 17:53
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<3
Nothing will change unless you make it.
  Posted on February 11, 2010 18:02
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kaiza-uchiha wrote:
y does n-b even have a section 4 writing poems :huh :sick

a) Because some people are on a different intelligence level
b) Because some people feel like showing off their emotions/skills
c) Because it has all kinds of threads. They could keep it down to game discussion, but hey, why not? It's more fun
My poems

These poem names are so original...
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  Posted on February 11, 2010 18:04
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cool 9/10 :teeth :teeth :teeth
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Hooray for the past? :3
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  Posted on November 4, 2011 15:23
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Touchy. :amused 10/10