X's Poem/Rap

XxdiversexX Rank: member Forum Rank: Academy Student Posts: 24 Joined on: November 24, 2008

#1 She is the most beautiful figure that stands out in this community all girls ain't on her level so this is your only oppertunity she is the one that unites all girls within one unity what makes her beautiful is her soul and perfect purity I state all guyz who got a chance withchu all lack maturity but im the one who will give you full security and don't even bother with maturity cuz i pass it with flying colors and straight up purity rate and say what could make it better ClanLess

Trepadora-Two Rank: member Forum Rank: Missing-Nin Posts: 2527 Joined on: September 6, 2009

#2 Something that isn't about a girl. 22 % //•T r e p a d o r a ☮ •Ulquiorra_san & Avy by Akatsunara //• Ugh, Gtfo of my face. iTrepa™ <----Kyuubi rage.

Basshunter Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1253 Joined on: September 23, 2007

#3 4/10 Didn't get the first part where you said opportunity. What did you mean? Edit: also didn't get the part of maturity. In poems, besides of the rhyme, consider the meaning of it. You are never given a dream without also being given the power to make it true.

XxdiversexX Rank: member Forum Rank: Academy Student Posts: 24 Joined on: November 24, 2008

#4 Quote by Trepadora-Two Something that isn't about a girl. 22 % explain more i don't understand ClanLess

RuneFang Rank: member Forum Rank: Chuunin Posts: 453 Joined on: October 1, 2009

#5 it dosent sound like a poem sounds more like rap to me 0/10 sorry hate rap ♪ Click the sig to head to my chat♪ <---Sig Credit Bimbo231 funniest topic in N-B history funny topic My Custom Characters // Who are you?

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#6 i would take some of the weaker lines and make them imperfect rhymes to strengthen it because your continual rhyme loses effect about halfway through, add breaks to it and the mind doesn't get so tired of it ¦¦ ℓαzу© ¦¦ Asy = Sanctum ¦¦ тoo мucн ¦¦ Platinum FC: 0947 3492 7688 ¦¦ ¦¦ Arguing With An Idiot, Makes You An Idiot ¦¦ Hail Metagross ¦¦

Trepadora-Two Rank: member Forum Rank: Missing-Nin Posts: 2527 Joined on: September 6, 2009

#7 Quote by XxdiversexX Quote by Trepadora-Two Something that isn't about a girl. 22 % explain more i don't understand About 73 percent fo poems are about girls. Choose something more inspiring. Like.......................... Ketchup. //•T r e p a d o r a ☮ •Ulquiorra_san & Avy by Akatsunara //• Ugh, Gtfo of my face. iTrepa™ <----Kyuubi rage.

XxdiversexX Rank: member Forum Rank: Academy Student Posts: 24 Joined on: November 24, 2008

#8 Quote by Trepadora-Two Quote by XxdiversexX Quote by Trepadora-Two Something that isn't about a girl. 22 % explain more i don't understand About 73 percent fo poems are about girls. Choose something more inspiring. Like.......................... Ketchup. lol, but girls are cute angels sent from above, y not give em the attention at a time ClanLess

Basshunter Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1253 Joined on: September 23, 2007

#9 Quote by XxdiversexX Quote by Trepadora-Two Quote by XxdiversexX Quote by Trepadora-Two Something that isn't about a girl. 22 % explain more i don't understand About 73 percent fo poems are about girls. Choose something more inspiring. Like.......................... Ketchup. lol, but girls are cute angels sent from above, y not give em the attention at a time That's not the kind of attention they want. Mine would kill me if I sang rap. You are never given a dream without also being given the power to make it true.

jun-ongbaksu Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 673 Joined on: May 26, 2008

#10 yeah not the best poem/rap i eva heard but good try..........i think... |-|If being dry was a crime id be your suspect|-|Triad Thread|-| |-| NZ |-| Paramore Junkie|-|Poem reader|-|sig by my bro enspire|-|

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