Ari's short poem.

Shino*Girl Rank: member Forum Rank: Akatsuki Posts: 11056 Joined on: September 24, 2006

#1 Extremely short free-verse. - I should’ve known better than to search for what was never on this land. Something about being a villain is wrong. I, the one who aims to overcome the fantasy what I could never conceive awaits me. So, what if I took advantage of you? You weren’t the one blinded, it was I, that you trampled with heartlessness. My pillar withholding ambition is what is keeping me alive at this moment. Love is a mere never-land, born in selfishness’s wake. You doubt what I am saying but, I’m correct. - Constructively comment and/or criticize. And indefinitely the message is there. Ah yes, what I searched for that I shouldn't have was "friendship". I'm sorry if my poem's to hard to analyze and understand. /sarcasm/.

00SHARINGAN00 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3100 Joined on: May 23, 2009

#2 Uhhh................ 6/10.

OneTailCoda Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1277 Joined on: August 1, 2009

#3 Nice I like it!9.1|10:oh ''I don't need a signature'' DEAD.

Omniweapon Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4161 Joined on: December 23, 2007

#4 Not bad \ 7.5/10 avy: BrendoBryan Tag: _Dark22

skullfire98 Rank: member Forum Rank: Chuunin Posts: 407 Joined on: April 9, 2009

#5 9/10 Wow Super Dragon Soul

Tir Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3238 Joined on: October 24, 2007

#6 10/10. Based on life is what I like.

mainman Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4314 Joined on: June 2, 2007

#7 nice 8/10................................

riku567 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1769 Joined on: October 26, 2008

#8 ~9/10 Very Nice~ ||Leave all your love and your longing behind. You can't carry it with you if you want to survive, the dog days are over|| Lazy_Genius_13 wrote: they learned from emir i guess, long anticipation + short satisfaction = addiction If your love was a giant hand, could I be the penis and let you wrap around me snuggly?

Coolidger Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2391 Joined on: August 17, 2006

#9 Not at all. Easy to understand what your getting at. 6/10 ~Retired This man will be missed! <3 ~ Nimetz Alex is mine! Get back, woman!~Dassyyyy I love you ~ Dimmy

garrarules1 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2434 Joined on: June 5, 2007

#10 It explains life perfectly, another good one. 10/10:amused "The good times today, are the bad thoughts of tomorrow" "We are all witnesses" R.I.P mom and dad </3

Shino*Girl Rank: member Forum Rank: Akatsuki Posts: 11056 Joined on: September 24, 2006

#11 Thanks everyone.

experiment18 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1701 Joined on: July 15, 2008

#12 ah, great poem again wondeful! Hoppy<3

crazyaleks Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 4059 Joined on: January 19, 2010

#13 10......................................... You say "Crazy" like it's a bad thing!

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