The World outside my Window

Philosoph Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 64 Joined on: November 7, 2009

#1 The World outside my Window I can take a look out of the window. What i see is not the world i used to know. It's something that seems surreal, I can't believe my eyes. Is this really the snow which used to fall? Since when does winter last 12 months a year? It seems cold and sunshine is nowhere to be seen. What happened to the world who used to love? Or maybe the world has always been like this And time has made me realize the truth outside my window. "Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say, because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said, it would change everything." ~Philosoph The World outside my Window

sasuke_shadow7 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1830 Joined on: January 24, 2009

#2 Nice ako.lion.saske.sannin.sity.dawi my Sexy Hoe´s Yeah Megan i wish i could F*ck you !!

MINGMAR2008 Rank: member Forum Rank: Sannin Posts: 3500 Joined on: February 13, 2009

#3 stunning poem 10/10 AVY AND TAG BY ME, SIG BY MILTAN

Trepadora-Two Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2524 Joined on: September 6, 2009

#4 I cried a little. Nice. //•T r e p a d o r a ? •Ulquiorra_san & Avy by Akatsunara //• Ugh, Gtfo of my face. iTrepa™ <----Kyuubi rage.

Philosoph Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 64 Joined on: November 7, 2009

#5 I am glad to hear that my poem reached you people. "Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say, because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said, it would change everything." ~Philosoph The World outside my Window

experiment18 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1701 Joined on: July 15, 2008

#6 what a wonderful poem... i loved it!!! Hoppy<3

Philosoph Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 64 Joined on: November 7, 2009

#7 I want to say thanks to all people who read my poem. "Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say, because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said, it would change everything." ~Philosoph The World outside my Window

Dtim Rank: member Forum Rank: Chuunin Posts: 335 Joined on: December 27, 2006

#8 1) Change the general title of the thread. Winow that is 2) Nice. Make it rhymed and I'll give you a 8/10 cookie. If you manage to make it really nice, you will defiantly receive a 10 =) Sorry for the "rhyming poems" propaganda. I just really want to see people to shape their thoughts, not just put them down and call them "poems" My poems These poem names are so original...

Philosoph Rank: member Forum Rank: Genin Posts: 64 Joined on: November 7, 2009

#9 Dtim wrote: 1) Change the general title of the thread. Winow that is 2) Nice. Make it rhymed and I'll give you a 8/10 cookie. If you manage to make it really nice, you will defiantly receive a 10 =) Sorry for the "rhyming poems" propaganda. I just really want to see people to shape their thoughts, not just put them down and call them "poems" 1st Thanks for pointing out the thing with the winow, didn't realized it till now. 2nd To try to force rhymes into this poem would destroy the feeling and the message, 'cause it is meant to sound "grey" and to keep a sad truth. The atmosphere i build up would be totally destroyed with rhymes so it isn't an option. 3rd Your last statement somehow felt to me like you were telling me that my poem was not well thought, and i got to say i feel a bit offened by those words and i feel also a bit disappointed since it seems that you didn't understand my poem. But still thanks that you took at least the time to read it. "Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say, because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said, it would change everything." ~Philosoph The World outside my Window

Shino*Girl Rank: member Forum Rank: Akatsuki Posts: 11056 Joined on: September 24, 2006

#10 I read it allowed, such wonderful word usage, a nice and clear message, and the flow makes that visible. Quite a nice job, I enjoyed.

jun-ongbaksu Rank: member Forum Rank: Special Jounin Posts: 882 Joined on: May 26, 2008

#11 good poem *claps* its got a nice message and words used is very deliberate but for me its just missing something..... i don't know what it is but i'll know when i know.... 8/10 ~sigless simplicity~

Valex Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 2246 Joined on: July 15, 2006

#12 Everyone keeps saying how nice it is but no one even understands wtf it's saying. I like it, except you could've taken it further by going on about what happened instead of exclaiming how you feel about it. ME MO RI E S

nh13 Rank: member Forum Rank: Jounin Posts: 1920 Joined on: May 10, 2009

#13 Maybe both. The world is changing and we only see the truth when we look outside the window. Wise words. someone who secretly loves me

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