The World outside my Window


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  Posted on November 8, 2009 17:13
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The World outside my Window


I can take a look out of the window.
What i see is not the world i used to know.
It's something that seems surreal,
I can't believe my eyes.
Is this really the snow which used to fall?
Since when does winter last 12 months a year?
It seems cold and sunshine is nowhere to be seen.
What happened to the world who used to love?
Or maybe the world has always been like this
And time has made me realize the truth outside my window.
"Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say,
because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said,
it would change everything."
~Philosoph
The World outside my Window
  Posted on November 8, 2009 17:15
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Nice :amazed
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  Posted on November 8, 2009 17:15
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:cry :cry
stunning poem
10/10
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  Posted on November 8, 2009 17:22
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I cried a little. :oh
Nice.
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  Posted on November 8, 2009 17:32
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I am glad to hear that my poem reached you people.
"Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say,
because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said,
it would change everything."
~Philosoph
The World outside my Window
  Posted on November 8, 2009 19:41
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what a wonderful poem...
i loved it!!!
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  Posted on November 10, 2009 19:53
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I want to say thanks to all people who read my poem.
"Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say,
because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said,
it would change everything."
~Philosoph
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  Posted on November 11, 2009 20:57
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1) Change the general title of the thread. Winow that is
2) Nice. Make it rhymed and I'll give you a 8/10 cookie. If you manage to make it really nice, you will defiantly receive a 10 =)

Sorry for the "rhyming poems" propaganda. I just really want to see people to shape their thoughts, not just put them down and call them "poems"
My poems

These poem names are so original...
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  Posted on November 19, 2009 19:44
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Dtim wrote:
1) Change the general title of the thread. Winow that is
2) Nice. Make it rhymed and I'll give you a 8/10 cookie. If you manage to make it really nice, you will defiantly receive a 10 =)

Sorry for the "rhyming poems" propaganda. I just really want to see people to shape their thoughts, not just put them down and call them "poems"
1st Thanks for pointing out the thing with the winow, didn't realized it till now.
2nd To try to force rhymes into this poem would destroy the feeling and the message, 'cause it is meant to sound "grey" and to keep a sad truth. The atmosphere i build up would be totally destroyed with rhymes so it isn't an option.
3rd Your last statement somehow felt to me like you were telling me that my poem was not well thought, and i got to say i feel a bit offened by those words and i feel also a bit disappointed since it seems that you didn't understand my poem.
But still thanks that you took at least the time to read it.
"Very Often are the things that stay unsaid more important than the things you can say,
because those unsaid things have such a high importance, that if they are said,
it would change everything."
~Philosoph
The World outside my Window
  Posted on November 19, 2009 23:50
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I read it allowed, such wonderful word usage, a nice and clear message, and the flow makes that visible. Quite a nice job, I enjoyed.
  Posted on November 20, 2009 03:11
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good poem *claps*

its got a nice message and words used
is very deliberate but for me its just missing something.....
i don't know what it is but i'll know when i know....

8/10
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  Posted on February 16, 2010 05:32
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Everyone keeps saying how nice it is but no one even understands wtf it's saying.

I like it, except you could've taken it further by going on about what happened instead of exclaiming how you feel about it.
  Posted on February 17, 2010 17:43
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Maybe both.
The world is changing and we only see the truth when we look outside the window.

Wise words.
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