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someone wrote a poem on here and for whatever reason i decided to edit it a bit to make it suit my standards for it's flow and whatnot, but i still attempted to retain their original message and theme as you'll see i managed if familiar with my own work
but tell me what you all think of this edit of a poem
My Resting Place
I have come to my resting place.
Where the air is fresh,
The wind is cool
The rocks white
The sands fine
Where the trees are dense
The land lush
And the heavens and stars
Light your heart in the night
I remove the ropes
Untie my boat.
I have come to my resting place.
I rest in my resting place.
The birds fly free
While the fish swim deep
Horses run wild
And foxes bear child
Sheep can cry silently
And crickets need not hum
The water and the ocean
Lap at your feet
Gently while you sleep.
I gather the wool
And whisper of the wild.
I have come to my resting place.
I rest within my resting place
I have come to my resting place.
I spent my life
Searching for this place to die
Where sunset shall give way
To a crimson sky,
A beautiful morn’
With its brilliant streaks
Reflecting the horizon
I go to the wind
Setting up the sail
I fly within the sky
And soar with the birds
I have come to my resting place.
I rest within my resting place
I have not died in pain.
I have settled to my resting place.
The wind now picks up
The waves build
The crickets now hum
The sheep begins to weep
I hear the fox howl
The sail catches wind
My boat moves
There, these prayers of the wild
Will not be forgotten
For,
I have come to my resting place.
So now, I shall be on my way.
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Topic: edit of a poem
Posted on November 22, 2008 07:50
