The War: Prologue+Chapter 1 - Page 2

hyuugaitachi007 Rank: member Forum Rank: Warm Cookie Posts: 1850 Joined on: August 30, 2007

#16 Nice story but I HAVE A COUPLE OF SUGGESTIONS: - For the first part, maybe you could put something like: "Chapter One Posted!", or maybe you can just put all the chapters on the first post. - Improve your punctuation. Overall, its turning interesting. I hope I can read all of it, but it is pretty hard to find stories here on the boards. Nice job! Click the Asuma sig by me for Stickied Missions Guide. Click the Jiraiya sig by Froggy for our awesome Clan Thread Grammar Freak & Narutard || Emperors: 2nd Generation || My Characters || My Story || Show off your life!

thousandsunfire Rank: member Forum Rank: Candy Cane Posts: 4395 Joined on: November 14, 2007

#17 i agree with Shino*Girl, i think you should post the chapters in separate threads. as for the story, its pretty cool. i cant wait to read more. -sig and avatar by me N-A Engine Shippuuden Character Collection Seethe - Final Chapter Released Revolving Skies - Chapter 3 Released

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