untold love (My first story in the romance genre

leaderofakatsuki Rank: member Forum Rank: Missing-Nin Posts: 2261 Joined on: October 13, 2006

#1 Please deal with me this is my first time doing a short astory like this, wel;l this genre anyways... One week before sound 4 mission to kidnap sasuke takes place, tayuya sits in a tree playing her flute. "???: Tayyuya, so this is where you've been hiding." Tayuya turns her head to see Kabuto walking along the grounds. "Kabuto: Are you just going to sit there playing that flute? His conditions getting worse you know." Tayuya sets her flute down before jumping out of the tree facing kabuto. "Tayuya: Why the hell should I care if his conditions getting worse, what the hell do tou think he means to me?" Kabuto gave a sinister smile as hi mixed his glasses position on his nose. "Kabuto: More then your emitting or even trying to hide. But it has little to do to me, you sahould prepare for the mission alonf with the others. Oh also before I forget, if you would like to see him he's in the med lab." Kabuto turned away walking off from wence he came. "Tayuya: Damn you kabuto, i dont give a damn abut him... he should just die already" Tayuya began playing her flute missing note after note until shegot frustrated. "Tayuya Damn that kabuto..." Tayuya started of to the med lab, there she saw kim laying face up on a medical table, his face covered by a wet cloth as well as many needles and tubes connected to his body. Tayuya looked at kimimaro then looked away, her eyes slowly closing as she began turning away. "Kimimaro: Tayuya.... what is it.." Tayuya stopped in surprised and turned her head still seeing the wet rag still covering his face. "Tayuya: H..How the hell you know its me?" "Kimimaro: Kabuto told me to be expecting you... And..." Tayuya cleched her fist "Tayuya: Damn that Kabuto...wait and what?" Kimimaro remained silent. for a moment "Kimimaro: Are you ready for your mission? Master orochimaru is dying he must have his new container soon." Tayuya stomped over to Kimimaro. "Tayuya: Damnit Kimimaro don't change the damn subject, what was you about to say?" to be continued.. if i feel like it ima be the one to set it off G until we thru ya who the f*ck yall punks ganna regulate at the radio talking bout retaliate talk'n bout my salarie yall dead as a battery this to you n ya motha f*ck'n army aint none b*tch bout to harm me n if u do its gone b back and forth ima hit ya ass with deadly force n f*ck tha source my enemies vs my warriors with me in our favor we gladiators

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#2 Short ... damn its like reading a dictionary... || Fallen Legacy || Gimp User || || Everything made by meh || || SWC will never be forgoten ||

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#3 8/10 pretty good Click on the eggs... if you don't they will die! click on the eggs or they will die in 3 days

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#4 I only read the first bit but its goog gj 7/10 || Fallen Legacy || Gimp User || || Everything made by meh || || SWC will never be forgoten ||

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#5 lol, its a bit short and theres too many spelling errors ||:Lazy's Team/Counter Guide:||:Shinsei Toukai:||:Lazy's Mission Guide:|| ||:Crap/noob Gfxer:||:Above sig by me:||:Science is Golden o.o:|| ^^Sig from Blake^^ =D

leaderofakatsuki Rank: member Forum Rank: Missing-Nin Posts: 2261 Joined on: October 13, 2006

#6 Quote by bauressj Short ... damn its like reading a dictionary... lol i know its short i decided to stop writing it i suck at romance stories ima be the one to set it off G until we thru ya who the f*ck yall punks ganna regulate at the radio talking bout retaliate talk'n bout my salarie yall dead as a battery this to you n ya motha f*ck'n army aint none b*tch bout to harm me n if u do its gone b back and forth ima hit ya ass with deadly force n f*ck tha source my enemies vs my warriors with me in our favor we gladiators

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#7 10/10 but wheres part two first sig made buy ita second by me

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#8 Quote by zamkxsnj234 10/10 but wheres part two i might work on it later ima be the one to set it off G until we thru ya who the f*ck yall punks ganna regulate at the radio talking bout retaliate talk'n bout my salarie yall dead as a battery this to you n ya motha f*ck'n army aint none b*tch bout to harm me n if u do its gone b back and forth ima hit ya ass with deadly force n f*ck tha source my enemies vs my warriors with me in our favor we gladiators

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#9 meh nice work 7/10 Quote by jENT kappa is with no doubt our #1 king spammer his spam skills are beyond to our imagination O.O. Whore House Porn

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#10 keeewwwl 7/10. :o • GrandLine • <3<3<3 • Showcase • DNC<3 • Nem's Twin<3 • Muffins. • << Ahhiko

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#11 thankz yay i havent got a 5 yet ima be the one to set it off G until we thru ya who the f*ck yall punks ganna regulate at the radio talking bout retaliate talk'n bout my salarie yall dead as a battery this to you n ya motha f*ck'n army aint none b*tch bout to harm me n if u do its gone b back and forth ima hit ya ass with deadly force n f*ck tha source my enemies vs my warriors with me in our favor we gladiators

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#12 haha, kimitayuya, this is the first story I read in NB so i'll give it a 7.6/10

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#13 4/10 needs way more work.. :|: Leader of *Ater-Animus* :|: :|: NA account: Tzatzi007 :|: :|: NB Families :|: ^ Click for Ater-Animus Thread ^ Sig by me; Middle GFX-er Ater-Animus, a ghost of the past... GL to all of my ex-members, I'm gonna miss you!

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