Yume (Dream)

teiji_uchiha Rank: member Forum Rank: Snowman Posts: 1460 Joined on: July 27, 2006

#1 I wish to sleep, and forever to slumber for there in my slumber, I dream and in dreams I can be free to forever live in bliss I wish to dream for whenever I dream I escape the madness that eternally plague this doomed world there I can hide under the cloak of pretense that pain and sorrow had never existed there I can defy physical boundaries there I can cross thresholds and reach places where the world of waking cannot To dream is to fly across oceans with wings of imagination and hope and soar above the heavens where I can search for one whom I have always longed to hold in my arms so I can fly to him and finally believe that happiness is also meant for me there I can feel the love he concealed there I can read his buried thoughts that I may know just what to do to offer him the gift of bliss so I wish to slumber deep so that I may dream of being with him Shun <3 Teiji • Cynical Angel poetry thread • Kage no Tenshi (added part 12!) >>>Shunni fanclub! -Valkyria- ::Ars Amatoria::

SasukeJo Rank: member Forum Rank: Candy Cane Posts: 4646 Joined on: August 30, 2007

#2 nice poem 8/10 ::Thanks naruto7xy for the sig.:: Goryo Chandra PC:: Sig from Kw::

americano Rank: member Forum Rank: Candy Cane Posts: 4902 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#3 wow 7/10. i won my first tourny i ruled with an iron fist

Masta_J Rank: member Forum Rank: Penguin Posts: 3198 Joined on: June 29, 2007

#4 cool 7.5/10 |:| Masta |:| Genesis™ |:| Requirements |:| Showcase |:| Respected |:| Quote by MilkRules Take a noob, give him a fancy avatar and a banner, and add in the protection of the internet, and you've made an ass. Congrats!

Hinata212 Rank: member Forum Rank: Snowman Posts: 993 Joined on: July 5, 2007

#5 i like it 10/10 my sig made by my friend tray ~~Purple~~

joshuahyuuga Rank: member Forum Rank: Candy Cane Posts: 5035 Joined on: June 4, 2007

#6 10 Spoiler Remind me of Shun Ripped From Sass =D Call me Joshy

QBZRaikage10 Rank: member Forum Rank: Warm Cookie Posts: 2162 Joined on: June 3, 2007

#7 Nice 8/10. Get Genesized Bitch.

ChaosWarg Rank: member Forum Rank: Snowman Posts: 1292 Joined on: September 24, 2007

#8 7 of 10 Sanctuari Eternum||Leader|| LET THE WORLD FEAR MY POWER

DRN_Shikamaru Rank: member Forum Rank: Warm Cookie Posts: 2123 Joined on: November 24, 2006

#9 I especially like the repetition of "I wish to sleep" to "I wish to dream", its a very strong technique and always gets kudos from me, made even better by its repetition at the end. Gives the whole poem a sense of...well, I hate to say it, but hopelessness, because it seems that dreams envelop the entire idea, meaning that only through dreaming can it be achieved. This, of course, isn't a criticism, its an interpretation ;) I don't know if you intended the hopelessness but from the radiant terms used in the dream sequence, it seems that such positivity is unavailable in the "real" world. The speaker seems to be damaged, in that she finds solace in memory and hope, rather than the present. I can guess why, but remember I don't do "author-orientated" analysis ;) Good work :) ZOMBIE INVASION The pink Leprechauns have gone to the pub Showcase | JM Part Two | Ars | JinMei Week Ultimate Dumpling Tournament Winners Gundam Muffin: Darth--Luke & Ezdragon2 (ft. Ninjaboy002)

Ars_Amatoria Rank: member Forum Rank: Snow Hare Posts: 182 Joined on: February 23, 2008

#10 Indeed, it was meant to give a sense of hopelessness, for most of the time we truly find solace in dreams... dreams are our lost hopes, they represent what we want but can sometimes never have... so yes, Ryan, you've done well in interpreting it. You might as well apply "author-oriented" analysis too. Thank you, btw. Send me your work if you wish to join Ars Amatoria I am wildly attracted to DRN_Shikamaru, Elpizo and Kingz_ro and regularly partake in mass orgies with all three<They are very sexy and fun POTW #7: Selecting Finalists Quote by DRN EVERYONE should have a DRN quote in their sig. It ought to be the law. ^^^Elpizo totally agrees with this as long as the quote is DRN saying that he loves Elpizo

ChaosXX Rank: member Forum Rank: Snowman Posts: 1243 Joined on: September 2, 2006

#11 10/10 yeah, I feel your hear Teiji... God bless you -=Hellbound Clan Page=- ::::Ars Amatoria:::: ::::Shikamaru31, my bro:::: ::::Cat's gift::::

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